Jim Charter <jrc### [at] msncom> wrote:
> Thematically I feel like the thought is there, the elements are orbiting
> around but haven't come together quite yet. Compositionally, the
> symmetry, with the ruin right in the center, perhaps calls for something
> more pared down and stark, or else the lushness wants for less symmetry?

> The strange coincedence of events around the cross with raven, for
> instance, leaving the tree behind seem to float.

I agree with Jim that this is a great start, but having the ruins dead-center
and flanked by the dead trees is a bit too symetrically boring. Moving the
camera (and therefore the ruins) off to one side would help the composition
greatly and would remove the unfortunate tangent of headstone->raven->dead
tree. Leading the eye compositionally is something that can really make or
break a piece.

Also, as others mentioned, more roughness to the dead tree and I'd like to see
some stone or brick work peering through the "stucco."

-Rob

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