Thanks for the comments, I mostly agree with you but there's a lot of things 
I still want to add to the image so I don't know how much of this I'll have 
time to change. Anyway to address your points:


> - The protoplanetary disk fades out and gets very smooth at the outer 
> edge.  It
> might be a little more interesting if it were wispier, but I'm not sure 
> about
> the physical accuracy of that.  Maybe it just needs a little more contrast 
> in
> the colors.

Yeah the fade looks a bit boring, I'm going to add a small amount of 
wispiness, though on that kind of scale I'd expect things to look fairly 
smooth, for example saturn's rings look near perfect from a distance.

I didn't google for any reference photos for this image because I want a 
more abstract/fantasy feel from my own imagination (I'm too lazy).

> - Second, I'm not completely sold on the layout.  There may be a smooth 
> curve
> from one end to the other, but it feels just a little loose since there 
> aren't
> quite enough objects to tell for sure.

I've gone for a 5:1 ratio so that you have to scroll the image horizontally 
to see the whole thing. This isn't obvious at the moment because the test 
renders are pretty small... plus I'm not sure I'll have time for a really 
high-res render so it might not work in the final scene!

Secondly the scene is a 380-degree view, so in theory you should print it on 
the inside of a cylinder for correct viewing! From a story telling point of 
view this matters because the star at the start & end is literally the same 
star, the circle of life, etc... :)

However I am working on leading the eye better. I feel the left half of the 
image really struggles so that's what I'm focussing on. I'm adding some more 
rocks to the 2nd disc to tie in with the lava-planet, then I'm going to tie 
the discs in better with the cloud of stellar gas. I'm also messing with the 
overall background colours, because I think that can really help the sense 
of progression from left to right.

Thanks again for the criticism, it was very constructive :)

-- 
Tek
http://evilsuperbrain.com


"triple_r" <nomail@nomail> wrote in message 
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> "Tek" <tek### [at] evilsuperbraincom> wrote:
>> A couple of small tweaks...
>
> I assume you're going for constructive criticism so I'll save the praise. 
> That
> said, it's already very impressive.  You're really a master of POV-Ray
> textures.  Nevertheless:
>
> - The protoplanetary disk fades out and gets very smooth at the outer 
> edge.  It
> might be a little more interesting if it were wispier, but I'm not sure 
> about
> the physical accuracy of that.  Maybe it just needs a little more contrast 
> in
> the colors.  I guess jets aren't out of the question either.  You can 
> google it
> as well as I can, but:
>
> http://www.nasa.gov/centers/jpl/images/content/133291main_DustRing-browse.jpg
> http://www.indiana.edu/~rcapub/images/MMWaveDisk.jpg
> http://hubblesite.org/newscenter/archive/releases/1995/24/image/a
>
> - Second, I'm not completely sold on the layout.  There may be a smooth 
> curve
> from one end to the other, but it feels just a little loose since there 
> aren't
> quite enough objects to tell for sure.  Maybe if it were a little stronger 
> or
> if the image were a little taller and followed a layout more like:
>
> *__
>    *_
>      *
>     *_
>       *__
>           *
>
> Again, I know that's very invasive; I'm just saying what comes to mind.  I 
> just
> have a hard time getting completely absorbed in it with a 5:1 aspect 
> ratio.
> For example, this one guides my eyes a little more:
>
> http://www.oyonale.com/iss.php
>
> I know time is winding down though, and it's a wonderful image no matter 
> what.
> Good work
>
> - Ricky
>

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