On Thu, 08 Oct 2009 22:35:43 +0200, clipka <ano### [at] anonymousorg> wrote:

>Stephen schrieb:
>
>>> And the midwife fainted.
> >
>> "The doctor nearly fainted"
>> Scans better to me :)
>
>No, as for rhythm the midwife version is much better.

You must be translating it. There is no rhyme (at the end of the lines). "And
the midwife fainted." Sounds "clunky" and a conversation stopper to me. A bit
like;

BEAUTIFUL Railway Bridge of the Silvery Tay !
With your numerous arches and pillars in so grand array
And your central girders, which seem to the eye
To be almost towering to the sky.
The greatest wonder of the day,
And a great beautification to the River Tay,
Most beautiful to be seen,
Near by Dundee and the Magdalen Green.



-- 

Regards
     Stephen

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