Orchid XP v8 wrote:
> What do we think of this then?

Muuuch better!

Just a few nits:

Personally, I'd leave "bright" in there. You'll have to decide. :-)

"Learned Tcl/Tk in a week" is misspelled.

Instead of "(see next point)", I'd write "(including those described 
next)".  This implies there are many you did, but the next ones are most 
important.

I'm not sure I'd use the word "routine" in "routine recording of 
changes". It sounds mundane. "Proactive recording of changes" perhaps, 
or something like that. Something implying it's not just mundane, but 
important to be consistent. "Consistent and proactive recording of all 
changes in configuration and procedures."

"fault-finding" is maybe a poor choice of words? It sounds like 
"figuring out who to blame" to my ears, even tho I know it's the right 
term. "fault tracing" perhaps?

Get rid of "(particularly backup and restore)". Seconded. :-)

Year 1: "soft systems analysis and design"?  Did you mean "software 
systems"?

"Caving" is technically called "spelunking". Not sure if you want to 
change that, tho.
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Overall, yes, much better. I'd hire that one. :-)

-- 
Darren New / San Diego, CA, USA (PST)

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